Draft essay feedback

• good understanding of subject and good start
• awkward phrasing in some places but what your saying is clear 
• too much reliance on Crow - concern for strength of the argument, needs more triangulation
• semiotics and cultural association - subjective in areas
• bibliography needs development
• compare the different associations we have with abstract art 
• Illustration : communication context, uses abstract style - motifs, mark making - to formulate meaning 
• abstract art - the art gallery, more personal and less commercial routes of communication
• look at other abstract artists - e.g. pollock